Comments on: Introduction

By: Bob Watkins

Bob Watkins — Thu, 15 Jul 2010 17:35:38 +0000

“Concentration is short-term focus. Long-term focus is driven by purpose.” These sentences should be moved into the next paragraph after the sentence, “This is the furthest thing from the truth.” I think you mean to say that what’s furthest from the truth is the notion that focus and concentration are the same thing, but that’s not how the text currently reads.

By: Mike

Mike — Tue, 08 Jun 2010 07:50:44 +0000

I noticed the same thing that Gayle noticed:

Under the section “So, without further ado, here’s what you’ll learn”, the first sentence, you’re missing a word

I would either say “This book will take you [through] a series…” or “This book will [show] you a series…”

By: Gayle

Gayle — Thu, 29 Apr 2010 02:11:56 +0000

Hello. Under the section “So, without further ado, here’s what you’ll learn”, the first sentence, you’re missing a word.

This book will take you [missing: through] a series of processes, modules and lessons that will retrain not just the way you think or act.

By: Mike

Mike — Fri, 23 Apr 2010 20:27:20 +0000

“As technology and entertainment has grown, so to has our inability to concentrate for extended periods of time”

It should be ‘so too’, as in so also has our inability to concentrate…

By: Sam Cranford

Sam Cranford — Fri, 16 Apr 2010 07:36:02 +0000

The sentence ‘A concept that will resurface itself again and again is “sustainability.” ‘ sounds awkward because of the itself. I would write something more like ‘ A concept that will resurface again and again throughout this book is “sustainability.” ‘ or just leave the itself out entirely.

By: Scott

Scott — Tue, 06 Apr 2010 03:57:45 +0000

Haha, OK, Jose. Sounds good.

By: Scott

Scott — Tue, 06 Apr 2010 03:54:07 +0000

Again, thank you very much Kristen! I’ll use the first sentence you suggested.

By: Scott

Scott — Tue, 06 Apr 2010 03:52:17 +0000

Thank you so much, Kristen! You rock! I just updated the chapter.

By: Kristen

Kristen — Mon, 05 Apr 2010 18:32:49 +0000

… will retrain not just the way you think or act[.] it will recalibrate the lens [through] which you view life[.] Change takes time. [Lots] of it. Sometimes it will seem like changing to become a more focused person is taking too long. For me, this was the case. Even after two weeks of attempting [every day] to establish focused habits, I would relapse[, getting] sucked into watching the Real Housewives of Orange County when it [was] “accidentally” on. … this journey is for you. But again, [the Hard Work is also for] you.

By: Kristen

Kristen — Mon, 05 Apr 2010 18:29:17 +0000

“…owning a yaht…” should be yacht.

“Sustainability is built on uncovering a purpose that has nothing to do with you, but solely on using your gifts to assist others.” I suggest either “Sustainability is built on uncovering a purpose that has nothing to do with you, but solely with using your gifts to assist others” or “Sustainability is built on uncovering a purpose that has nothing to do with you. Sustainability is built solely on using your gifts to assist others.” (Decide whether “using your gifts” should attach to “purpose” (1st edit) or “sustainability” (2nd).